Hey Fayrix! I'm TheShittyWiz, head redrawer at DT, here to give you a full assessment of your test.
Overall, the test looks promising for your first time, but there are a few things which need reworking.
I'll be going over the test page-by-page.
Page 1: This page simply isn't a pass and needs to be redone from the beginning. The biggest problems on this page are the use of the cloning tool and the linework. The cloning tool has at times been used at wrong angles, example: this part of the wall isn't in line with the rest
The line work on the page is inconsistent, a good example is this wall
, notice how the wall starts out a straight line but then starts slightly curving, if you have trouble drawing straight lines using the brush tool, you can just use the line tool instead. Additionally, the wall also changes thickness and colour, going from a black to a gray, then becoming a thick black for a short while, and afterwards turning gray again, if you have a hard time adjusting how black/white the line is, you can use the burning/dodging tools to adjust it.
Make sure you redraw everything so it looks as natural as possible, take a look at these trees
, there are 'holes' in the treetops left after the kanji
that were there originally, this makes them look unnatural, you also forgot to redraw this character
, which is a basic but critical mistake.
Page 2: looks very good overall, the only mistake was this part
which you forgot to redraw.
Page 3: Also looks good, only mistake here was this cloning
Page 4-6: These pages all look great, no complaints here!
So, if you want to retry you would have to completely redo page 1, and retouch page 2 and 3.
Final note: When you redraw, make sure to thoroughly check what you're doing and how it looks, both during and after the redrawing process, it's very easy to make mistakes while redrawing, therefore it's important to stay vigilant at all times, this holds especially true when you use the cloning tool, since it's very easy to make small mistakes which pile up over time.