Sorry for the tine it took to assess your test, yesterday has been a terribly busy day for me.
Our Head Typesetter reviewed your test and unfortunately, you don't pass.
You need to improve shaping of your blocks of text.
If you typeset SFX as notes, they ought to be outside panels. Felt font shouldn't be used for main text.
One-pixel strokes are too narrow to make much of a difference. If you're using stroke, the width should take into account font size and the original.
But he says page 5 was pretty good.
Feel free to try again, but just mind what we're recruiting typesetters for. DCD and Ouroboros aren't open for recruiting, and we don't do Death March (that's Eraser-kun Scans). The projects we need typesetters for are Shounen Y and Nanba MG5.